so I've written a poem, and I'd really like some feedback on it. I know it's pretty juvenile and I've done way better trust me. But I'd really like some opinions.
If you’re quiet for a second
you’ll hear the beating of my heart
but only if your silent
cause it’s been quiet from the start
it never beats too loudly...
As least it never has before.
But when I’m near you, it goes wild;
this is love and I’m for sure.
You used to make me happy
and you promised not to leave
“never-ever”’s what you said
I guess I’m easy to deceive.
Now I know that I’m not perfect
and I never said I was.
But my feelings haven’t tricked me..
It’s just you that I cant trust.
Welp.. Give it to straight forward,
I can handle constructive criticism,
and even rudness..
just give me the truth :)
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